The Exercise of College Ranking Considered Fiction or Fact Essay

Please consider the following points as you read the rough draft; check off and write COMMENTS for EACH editing point below to improve the assignment (please read ALL). Thank you for your careful consideration of your classmate’s writing.

 _____ Title:  Is the title appropriate, telling/informative, or needs improvement? Why/How?

_____ Thesis statement:  Is the thesis statement/purpose clear from the outset? 

______Introduction: Does the introduction create interest?  Sets the scene? How?

______ Specific details to support position:  Cite two to three specific details the writer uses to support their claims about the ethical issue. Is the evidence sufficient?

 _____ Logical organization:  Easy flow of ideas from one point to the next?  Paragraphs arranged in a logical manor? Transitions from point to point?

 _____ Who is the intended audience/target demographic? Suggest a publication/website/app, in/on which this would likely be published. Is the language/vocabulary suited for the intended audience?

 _____ Are there any issues with spelling, punctuation, grammar?

 _____ Conclusion:  Does the writer summarize the main points of emphasis relating back to the thesis statement?  Is there a clear call to action?

______ Are images/modes employed to enhance the piece? If not, please make suggestions.

______ Are the requirements met in terms of page limit and sources?

______What improvements can you suggest, especially to add to increase reader interes

How about “Should the Death Penalty be Abolished?”